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taotrooper) wrote2006-12-17 11:35 am
taotrooper) wrote2006-12-17 11:35 am
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And now THIS is a flame
Horrible, horrible, horrible. Poor and wooden exposition for *three*
chapters? I realise one can't avoid placing down a little groundwork
but for God's sake, this is ridiculous. If nothing else, Clow is such a
person to wish for Kaho to discover certain things for herself. It
would have been better to have him set her tasks of a sort, so that she
learns that she herself holds the answers already.
Nice premise, shitty execution.
But...
People who have read my E/K fic up to chapter 3, does this person actually have a point? I'm trying to think about it, but I'm fearing I might stick to my subjective logic and disagree with it forever.
Because, you know. I'm trying to think any moment Clow (as in Clow, not Eriol; maybe the reviewer confuses them?) wanted anyone to figure things out by his/herself. Let's see, uh... Sakura? Got her important explanations from Kero, Syaoran, Yue, Kaho, the Eriol-tachi. Clow always provided explanations to Sakura through people. The only person related to Clow who figures a big part of the picture, although not with the whole details, by his own was Touya, and Clow never had that much of a plan for him -or at least beyond giving Yue his magic, if Clow had known that.
Kero and Yue never figured things by themselves, would always find out about Clow's true schemes through the Eriol-tachi, and their memories were altered -more than once, in Yue's case- so they could never.
This is the people Clow loved and trusted. If he never wanted them to come up with answers on their own with no external help, why would he give a damn about bell-bearer Kaho, future reincarnation-girlfriend or not? He and Eriol can't figure out hearts for shit, so would they know she's capable of coming up with the answers on her own?
Also, we don't know how strong Kaho's clairvoyance is. I've thought long about it before writing this fic, and considering Kaho has sported a WTF face more than once during the Final Judgment, I doubt she could be able to figure everything by herself (with or without Eriol's explanations.)
And also, I find know-it-all!Kaho so boring and Sue-like. The Clow affair is messy, and most of the involved people could only understand the big plan after everything is done and you've heard everyone's story. If not even Clow Reed knew how everything would out to be... why would random shrine maiden Kaho Mizuki, who's described as much as an absent-minded person as she's insightful?
Dunno, that's the logic I used for my plotbunny. Obviously, if the reader's interpretation of the characters involved in my Eriol/Kaho is strongly against it, it might look "shitty", "ridiculous", and "horrible", I guess.
...That's what I'm trying to tell myself, but now I'm wondering if this person's not-flame part of her review does have a point, and my fic's exposition is truly that horrible and OOC for Kaho and Clow/Eriol. What do you, two people in my flist who read this fic and some other CCS fans, think? I need some outside perspective on how to take this. Be honest.
chapters? I realise one can't avoid placing down a little groundwork
but for God's sake, this is ridiculous. If nothing else, Clow is such a
person to wish for Kaho to discover certain things for herself. It
would have been better to have him set her tasks of a sort, so that she
learns that she herself holds the answers already.
Nice premise, shitty execution.
But...
People who have read my E/K fic up to chapter 3, does this person actually have a point? I'm trying to think about it, but I'm fearing I might stick to my subjective logic and disagree with it forever.
Because, you know. I'm trying to think any moment Clow (as in Clow, not Eriol; maybe the reviewer confuses them?) wanted anyone to figure things out by his/herself. Let's see, uh... Sakura? Got her important explanations from Kero, Syaoran, Yue, Kaho, the Eriol-tachi. Clow always provided explanations to Sakura through people. The only person related to Clow who figures a big part of the picture, although not with the whole details, by his own was Touya, and Clow never had that much of a plan for him -or at least beyond giving Yue his magic, if Clow had known that.
Kero and Yue never figured things by themselves, would always find out about Clow's true schemes through the Eriol-tachi, and their memories were altered -more than once, in Yue's case- so they could never.
This is the people Clow loved and trusted. If he never wanted them to come up with answers on their own with no external help, why would he give a damn about bell-bearer Kaho, future reincarnation-girlfriend or not? He and Eriol can't figure out hearts for shit, so would they know she's capable of coming up with the answers on her own?
Also, we don't know how strong Kaho's clairvoyance is. I've thought long about it before writing this fic, and considering Kaho has sported a WTF face more than once during the Final Judgment, I doubt she could be able to figure everything by herself (with or without Eriol's explanations.)
And also, I find know-it-all!Kaho so boring and Sue-like. The Clow affair is messy, and most of the involved people could only understand the big plan after everything is done and you've heard everyone's story. If not even Clow Reed knew how everything would out to be... why would random shrine maiden Kaho Mizuki, who's described as much as an absent-minded person as she's insightful?
Dunno, that's the logic I used for my plotbunny. Obviously, if the reader's interpretation of the characters involved in my Eriol/Kaho is strongly against it, it might look "shitty", "ridiculous", and "horrible", I guess.
...That's what I'm trying to tell myself, but now I'm wondering if this person's not-flame part of her review does have a point, and my fic's exposition is truly that horrible and OOC for Kaho and Clow/Eriol. What do you, two people in my flist who read this fic and some other CCS fans, think? I need some outside perspective on how to take this. Be honest.
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Yeah, it looks like that judging from this part: so that she learns that she herself holds the answers already. If it's about different interpretations, then there's no way she's going to like it. The thing is, that has nothing to do with the *quality* of the fic. I think the exposition was necessary and I wouldn't have cut it.
But I think it's great that you want to analyze it and see if there's some truth in it. It's the best way to deal with these things.